tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post589391581737802402..comments2023-10-21T08:34:09.036-06:00Comments on THE SOUND OF THE WORD NIGHT: OUTLINE ECLIPSEDS.E.Ingrahamhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02135141369161538082noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-30315148183699374492018-09-24T20:58:56.344-06:002018-09-24T20:58:56.344-06:00Yay!
yoo RITE!!
Gotta lotta
exceedingly
exquisite,...Yay!<br />yoo RITE!!<br />Gotta lotta<br />exceedingly<br />exquisite,<br />extraordinary<br />extravaganza<br />exponential<br />exactly.<br />Wannum?-blessed b9, Catalyst4Christhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13650964620664544661noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-28787694526368793032016-10-06T01:13:07.331-06:002016-10-06T01:13:07.331-06:00I too love what this says and the way it says it. ...I too love what this says and the way it says it. It might be fun to see what would happen if you attempted to bring it down to 44 words – sometimes such constraints will improve even a good poem – but this one is working so well as it is, that if it's a choice between being a quadrille and being what you intended, I'd choose to keep it as is.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-65447308959286886802016-09-28T18:55:41.084-06:002016-09-28T18:55:41.084-06:00I like the rhyme pattern in this piece. Well writ...I like the rhyme pattern in this piece. Well written. Arcadia Mariahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02632127814188649845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-78357737648015472552016-09-28T13:30:00.486-06:002016-09-28T13:30:00.486-06:00Ah.. though no quadrille I do enjoy the haunting q...Ah.. though no quadrille I do enjoy the haunting qualities of this... brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-35792247616749928422016-09-28T09:22:11.863-06:002016-09-28T09:22:11.863-06:00Great use of language in this Quadrille. The idea ...Great use of language in this Quadrille. The idea of a shadow being a Doppelganger is a great start, especially one you can't get rid of. But then it starts to shift and the shadow becomes more solid and I begin to doubt that this Doppelganger is benign. That is, until I get to ' super nova / - spirit-star'. This is dark and with a distinct chill: 'come over here in<br />to the light, my mole'. Kim M. Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668459794787447606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-75458188093220538792016-09-27T19:30:48.945-06:002016-09-27T19:30:48.945-06:00I enjoyed the rhyme.I enjoyed the rhyme.Frank Hubenyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18058591172624203875noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1360171536053320397.post-89349134889813084222016-09-27T17:53:12.521-06:002016-09-27T17:53:12.521-06:00This is a beautiful shadow poem, Sharon. I love &q...This is a beautiful shadow poem, Sharon. I love "ghost-trace," especially. <br /><br />Not a Quadrille, though. Needs to be exactly 44 words. Any chance you can do a shorter version for just that purpose? (Please be sure to keep ghost-trace, which I am enamored of, in. It would count as only one word, cuz of the hyphen.) ;) De Jacksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04798544585779003567noreply@blogger.com